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Would you use 'a' or 'an'?
Here's the line:
Jake managed a ‘mmm’, twisting his lips so that no sobs would escape.
I'm wondering about the 'a' before 'mmm'.
Comments
You're indicating a sound, not the single letter. You wouldn't say 'an miaow', although you would say 'an em'.
*slinks off, confused*
An for vowel-like sounds - an envelope, a package etc.
Wordy posted while I was writing my post - he's right - when you read it aloud 'an' sounds OK. But how many readers would read it aloud?
'Mmm' Jake managed, twisting his lips so that no sobs would escape.
Or like Claudia says, write it differently to avoid having to choose.
And you wouldn't have an mouse.
If he is saying ummm then put the u in, otherwise go with a.
Struggling to control a sob, only the merest 'mmm' sound escaped Jake's trembling lips.
'Struggling...'?
*chews it over*
PS Before some bright spark points it out. I've used struggling already in the sentence. Woe!
struggle… synonyms: move violently, thrash about, resist, fight back, kick, great effort
work… synonyms: labour, effort, exertion, toil
contort… synonyms: twist, screw up, warp
or is it the rose (imagine acute accent) talking?
Nah - I just like being bossy once in a while.
Now we can move on to TN's next dilemma
:-B
She came to see her Talkback chums, and put the question out.
'My lines won't scan, my words won't rhyme, please help me! Save the day!
Or else I will be called upon to throw the thing away.'
They scratched their heads, and chewed their pens, and gave it all they'd got,
And with their mighty brains engaged, untangled TN's knot.
And back she went to rhyming and got knotted up again
Bravo!
*smears wax over head and rips*