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Edited thread title: a different poetry question at the end. Scroll down, my lovelies...
THIS IS NO LONGER THE DISCUSSION. I AM SAVING SPACE BY ASKING ANOTHER QUESTION ABOUT A DIFFERENT POEM AT THE END!
I'll paste this in for now, then take it away later.This is a verse from a poem about a wicked old witchy lady. My question is about the word 'whipped'. It started off as 'whip' then I changed it to 'whipped'. I'm beginning to think I was right first time, but the more I look, the more confused I get. I suppose either tense works?
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It's gone. Missed your chance.
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think of the whole sentence "She'd let out a screech and whip them - "
then remove "let out a screech and" and it becomes clear.
So, in the words of Arnie: 'I'll (probably) be back...'
*breathes heavily*
Edited to say: I just have. Whoopee!
Anyway, back to business. I have too many syllables in the last line. Any ideas...?
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It's gone now.
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So has this.
Does that work? You have to draw out 'geometry' into geomet-ary...
I'm not sure the stress is in the right place in mathematics, heather.
It's got to be something to do with measuring. I could fit a monosyllabic word into the geometry line, but what?
may be more obvious if you move the 'in' to the end of the first line (just to check, then move it back)
de da de da de da de da (miss price quite lost her patience in)
de da de da de da (a mathematics test)
I've just tried to write it in dis and das, but it's making me go doolally.
a calculus exam?
I was reading mathematics as math/matics first time round. In the meantime, I changed it to:
A geometry class test.
So now it's a toss up between that and
A mathematics test.
They both sound OK.
Thanks, everyone!