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The most difficult part for me is I can write quite allusively. I like to give the overall feel of something without the need to explain every word. My editor asks for clarification on everything.
Page 1. I want to say 'they were halted in a winding rush,' for when they slam into a haystack. By that I mean they were winded on impact. Ed thinks the meaning is unclear. I see her point but my phrase fits the rhythm and mythical feel better than a simple factual statement. What do you think?