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Improving my "litany against weakness"

edited December 2013 in Writing
I've been working recently on my Power Point presentation about self-improvement and motivation, and I thought it would be a good idea to share with my fellow students my litany against weakness, which is a short, rather simple internal prayer supposed to give me strength and help me regain my self-control in will-testing times. However, I'm not as yet fully satisfied with either its form nor content and hence am asking for your help - just post anything that comes to your minds with regard to the above-mentioned topic, anything that may improve, polish and enrich the following:

Litany Against Weakness

From me the oceans spring,
In me the sunlight rests,
I’m only here and only now,
And I shall become whom I desire to be.

All feedback will be mightily appreciated! ;) Also, if you happen to know any motivational quotes, do not hesitate to share them. Thanks in advance to whomever finds time and MOTIVATION to help me.

Comments

  • C2C2
    edited December 2013
    "If I were asked to give what I consider the single most useful bit of advice for all humanity it would be this:

    Expect trouble as an inevitable part of life and when it comes, hold your head high, look it squarely I the eye and say, 'I will be bigger than you. You cannot defeat me.'

    Ann Landers.1918

    Personally, I don't believe prayers get you anywhere. I prefer self belief and determination gets better results.
  • I have always liked the poem 'If' by Rudyard Kipling.

    If—




    IF you can keep your head when all about you
    Are losing theirs and blaming it on you,
    If you can trust yourself when all men doubt you,
    But make allowance for their doubting too;
    If you can wait and not be tired by waiting,
    Or being lied about, don't deal in lies,
    Or being hated, don't give way to hating,
    And yet don't look too good, nor talk too wise:

    If you can dream - and not make dreams your master;
    If you can think - and not make thoughts your aim;
    If you can meet with Triumph and Disaster
    And treat those two impostors just the same;
    If you can bear to hear the truth you've spoken
    Twisted by knaves to make a trap for fools,
    Or watch the things you gave your life to, broken,
    And stoop and build 'em up with worn-out tools:

    If you can make one heap of all your winnings
    And risk it on one turn of pitch-and-toss,
    And lose, and start again at your beginnings
    And never breathe a word about your loss;
    If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
    To serve your turn long after they are gone,
    And so hold on when there is nothing in you
    Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!'

    If you can talk with crowds and keep your virtue,
    Or walk with Kings - nor lose the common touch,
    If neither foes nor loving friends can hurt you,
    If all men count with you, but none too much;
    If you can fill the unforgiving minute
    With sixty seconds' worth of distance run,
    Yours is the Earth and everything that's in it,
    And - which is more - you'll be a Man, my son!
  • [quote=ShineDelaNoire]From me the oceans spring,
    In me the sunlight rests,
    I’m only here and only now,
    And I shall become whom I desire to be.[/quote]

    I'd feel that i was equating myself with being a god with the first two lines.

    Mind you, I believe 'god' is us all, our collective consciousness, and until the spirits of us all which are born and return to the collective over and over become less evil, then there will always people doing evil, and often evil in a god's name.

    I believe it is the other way round - I spring from the oceans, etc.
  • [quote=Liz]I believe it is the other way round - I spring from the oceans, etc.[/quote]
    That's a very good point indeed, thank you!
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