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Dangling participle disease
Judging by feedback from a short story I submitted for an anthology I have dangling participle disease. Here's one example:
"Looming before them, an old manor house made of ancient stone."
Any thoughts on which of these, if any, would be a better way to rewrite it:
"An old manor house loomed before them."
"An old manor house, made of ancient stone, loomed before them."
"An old manor house made of ancient stone loomed before them."