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To me stoop implies both the bending part and the moving the neck. If someone said, 'she had a stoop' I'd picture a bent neck - so stooping necks towards grass is a bit like bending bent necks towards the grass.
Thank you, PM. That confirms that I can very much have giraffes roaming the English countryside. I hope that they will also be happy to gallop across the fields with children on their backs.
Hrmph. Just because one idiot boy thinks it's 'healthy' for his giraffe 'as his ancestors' did, doesn't mean it is. Look at how his ancestors treated actual people. More like, let's try riding this giraffe child I happen to have under my control - I know it won't kick me because giraffes are gentle.
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'Their necks were stooped towards the lush grass...'
So, maybe it should be:
'They were stooped towards the lush grass.'
Does it work with 'were'?
'Their heads were lowered towards the lush grass.'
That'll do... although I had grown fond of 'stooped'.
'Their necks were stooped' - by whom?
Maybe I shouldn't...
We haven't seen Baggy since she clicked it, but that's probably coincidence.
OK, here goes ...