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This is driving me mad

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  • Isabella KingIsabella King
    I want to describe that heart in mouth, stomach churning moment of shock at hearing an unwelcome voice in about four or five words.

    I'm currently using 'Lucy's back stiffened' but it just doesn't cut the mustard.

    Any ideas
  • midiamidia
    Lucy felt sick. ?
  • scribescribe
    Lucy's dinner (or insert last meal eaten) threatened to reappear.
  • TaffetaPunkTaffetaPunk
    Could Lucy's blood run cold?  I know the feeling, and it's hard to describe. 
  • Crazy HorseCrazy Horse
    Oh my God NO!!! thought Lucy
  • neilneil
    Oh, look who I am!

    The hairs on the back of her neck stood on end.

    Better sign out.

    Jay
  • Marc.BMarc.B
    a feeling of nausea overcame Lucy as soon as she recognised the voice, a voice she did not want to hear.
  • DaisyDaisy
    Lucy froze in horror.
  • Isabella KingIsabella King
    Thanks guys, I think I'm going with TP's suggestion - It seems to fit the mood best.

    Unless you know better...
  • AlikAlik
    Lucy froze, she felt her face go white and her heart start racing, her breathing became fast and shallow ....

    How's that?!
  • Les PantalonsLes Pantalons
    And then she heard it, that voice that was always like a knife twisting in her guts, lol.
  • TaffetaPunkTaffetaPunk
    Glad I could help x
  • Isabella KingIsabella King
    Right, now for the second sentence...

    I'm using 'Even after all this time it still had the power to set her pulse racing' but I'm not sure if pulse racing is quite right.

    Just joking :)
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