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This is driving me mad
Isabella King
September 2007
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Isabella King
September 2007
I want to describe that heart in mouth, stomach churning moment of shock at hearing an unwelcome voice in about four or five words.
I'm currently using 'Lucy's back stiffened' but it just doesn't cut the mustard.
Any ideas
midia
September 2007
Lucy felt sick. ?
scribe
September 2007
Lucy's dinner (or insert last meal eaten) threatened to reappear.
TaffetaPunk
September 2007
Could Lucy's blood run cold? I know the feeling, and it's hard to describe.
Crazy Horse
September 2007
Oh my God NO!!! thought Lucy
neil
September 2007
Oh, look who I am!
The hairs on the back of her neck stood on end.
Better sign out.
Jay
Marc.B
September 2007
a feeling of nausea overcame Lucy as soon as she recognised the voice, a voice she did not want to hear.
Daisy
September 2007
Lucy froze in horror.
Isabella King
September 2007
Thanks guys, I think I'm going with TP's suggestion - It seems to fit the mood best.
Unless you know better...
Alik
September 2007
Lucy froze, she felt her face go white and her heart start racing, her breathing became fast and shallow ....
How's that?!
Les Pantalons
September 2007
And then she heard it, that voice that was always like a knife twisting in her guts, lol.
TaffetaPunk
September 2007
Glad I could help x
Isabella King
September 2007
Right, now for the second sentence...
I'm using 'Even after all this time it still had the power to set her pulse racing' but I'm not sure if pulse racing is quite right.
Just joking :)
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I'm currently using 'Lucy's back stiffened' but it just doesn't cut the mustard.
Any ideas
The hairs on the back of her neck stood on end.
Better sign out.
Jay
Unless you know better...
How's that?!
I'm using 'Even after all this time it still had the power to set her pulse racing' but I'm not sure if pulse racing is quite right.
Just joking :)